Do you aspire to be a writer someday?

I am always curious to see what other people write    I can't guarantee I'll manage to read it all at one, but I would love it if you'd share a link so I can bookmark it and check it from time to time  

I would like to read your story Alyssia-San xD please give me the link or you can share the story here
honestly, I can't write any story in English but I had thousand experience about reading English story (I had read many fanfiction's and novel in English). So, I would glad to read your stories too xD

Yay thanks for the link, I bookmarked it for now. 
School has gotten busy, so I think I have some proper time to read it once the weekend has begun. 
But I will definitely read it. Again thanks for sharing  

@alyssia I've only read to chapter 2 of your story but, I'm hooked! I love this kind of story. 

@Alyssia I read a few lines  I really like this story so far

I also used to write a long time ago...its been a while since I've actually  written anything   I should really get back to it...

I used to dream about becoming a writer and I wrote a lot of short stories and poems when I was younger. But it kinda just faded, and now I'm feeling that I probably don't have the creative passion anymore. I still write a lot to different forums and some reviews, and of course school papers, but concocting an actual fiction seems like a horrible hassle now.

But I think I might read your text and let you know what I think, I still enjoy that fiction a lot even though I don't create it myself.

I'm adding you to my follow list Alyssia 

I like to read and tell stories however i often unpleased with what i write.(it doesn't stop me, but i am terribly slow when it comes to writing because of that). Ican't write in english (i think i would just die because of the spelling or grammar mistakes) but i do read tons of fanfiction, a few books and i would be very pleased to read what you wrote. 

Edit: Wow just the prologue is great and makes you want to know the rest.(i'm adding it to my library so i can follow your story after i finish to read the currents chapters.

Based on my preferences and what I do, I am not especially geared toward a writing profession, per se. While I enjoy writing extensively and can dream about my fictitious future success, I simply do not see myself making a living on this. I'd rather draw and incorperate my writing skills to supplement that field of interest. I have written quite a few short stories that I have never bothered to post publicly, but that is really all I ever do.

On the other hand, I would gladly be a strict and critical ass of an editor because I am always proofreading others' work anyway. That, however, typically means that I would need an English or perhaps Journalism degree to be considered credible, and I am psychologically terrified of touching library books. That is not a sound match for me.

It is a little ironic that I have had both a FictionPress and Wattpad for years, but they remain empty~ I was even in a writer's community application, but I deleted that and only kept the artist version. It is rather indicative of my aspirations.

Now I shall read your work~ Urg. I wish I had a computer to type.

Just some little things after glancing and the first few paragraphs. "Mommy" is considered a proper noun, so it would be capitalized. If it were after the word "my" or anything to indicate possession, then you would not capitalize it. Same goes for "aunt," "grandpa," blah blah~ Not terms of endearment.

As often as I read this type of dialogue-heavy writing in visual novels, it is just too much of a... modern way of writing. Vary your sentence structures a little more. You had a lot of sentences beginning with "She <verb>" throughout the chapters. Cut into dialogue so that it is not become a giant monologue – not that yours is insufferably lengthy.

To keep an active tense that holds more impact, use "will," not "would." Think about how you converse with others. It sounds unnatural to say, "I would be late on my class!" Aside from that, your preposition in that line should be "for." Also keep your tense consistent because you sometimes switch between past and present. Lastly, there were some frequent punctuation mistakes.

Since I am personally not into school stories, I pretty much skimmed the rest. But you can do it~! Just keep writing and learning from your mistakes. Many people are not as loud as me, so you need to take an active hand in your own progress.

@maika-chan

huwee, I always like reading your long comment haha. I already read the story, and I agree about the vary of words. Hm, English isn't my native language and I learn it from internet and movie, after reading your criticism I found something new like the capital used, and other tense. Honestly, I haven't understand about tense like 'would' and 'will', sometimes I wrote them while thinking 'aren't this the best way?' or 'it will be sound good like this'... haha I'm always like that while replaying on forum and hope people will understand what I mean >_<

nee, maybe you can teach me about English for writing? hehe

It's a hard concept for native English speakers, as well. People love their colloquialisms without even realizing it~ I totally hated my English classes, so it was probably because of my Latin classes (which explained syntax) that I understand this type of thing a *little* more clearly.

Regarding tense, "would" and "will" goes with the set of words that includes the verb. "Will" means that something is going to happen, while "would" can (depends on the context) mean that something had already happened.

"The pie would have burned had you had not arrived this fast."
"The pie will have burned by the time you finish showering."
"The pie will burn in the oven."

"Would" is used in conditional statements (though not necessarily using "if"). Like... "My teeth would show if I laugh." But modern people are lazy, so they do not always say the latter part with the "if" because it is usually understood or implied by context.

hee... I actually understand with your explanation, but it will bugs me again when I'm try to write something. hehehe Many thanks to you maika-chan, I hope I will get better in English writing hehe

ah, I also confused with a sentence which have two 'had' like you mention above, what does it mean?It's same like 'as blabla as'?

Ah, that was a mistype. You're talking about the first line with the bold words, right? The second "had" should not be there, so no.

oh I see.. thanks xD

Solely being a writer would put me on shaky ground, and the probabilities of being a success is extremely low. Therefore, I will only do it alongside my "normal" job.

I really do, and I really want to read your work, but I don't have a wattpad   

I wish I could marry a nice and rich man then be a writer, HAHAHAHA